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Issue 5 - General Feedback

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« Reply #15 on: September 27, 2008, 09:15:55 am »

There's a couple of errors I've spotted.
On your "Apartments of the world" section, clicking 'next' after the Tijuana article leads straight on to the article about sushi, completely skipping over the New York article, only accessible by clicking the 'previous' button. After clicking 'previous' on the Tijuana article, I'm also lead back to the New York article, meaning I'm stuck in a loops of sorts unless I go back to the index.
You also need to sort out your grammar. There are commas all over the place, for example
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Smith Estates is a website, which hosts designs of contemporary houses...
There shouldn't be a comma there. I also noticed the dreaded "It's" several times!
Also, I question your usage of "Casanova" to describe a female student. Casanova was a womaniser, and has connotations of masculinity. Maybe "Maneater" would have been a better suited term.
I hope you don't think I'm trying to tear your magazine apart, but I think you should get someone to check over it before you publish.
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